Hard floors and white sheets
Linen curtains and a ceiling fan
murmuring on low
She lies on her stomach with
sweat pooling slowly in the small of her back,
brow knotted,
while I fix something simple at the stove
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Yikes-- really mangled the initial draft. How I managed to write 'back' instead of 'stomach' is anybody's guess.
ReplyDeleteFucking Jesus.
Now, I'm confused about what's fictionalized and what's real (kind of like real life, too). And I totally guessed that you meant stomach when I read this. I mentally edited for you.Bear in mind that I just tried to reply to a friend leaving a comment on my blog three different times, with a new and different fucking typo each instance. I guess my point is, everybody mistypes. Supposedly Sebastian Junger is sub-literate without his editor and I enjoy knowing that as he peers imperiously out at me from Men's Journal issues I read at the doctor's office.
ReplyDeleteThere's one on here (don't know the degree of fictionalization) that I think is the best thing you've written. Sea salt? Add bitter root, small apartment? I'm sorry, that's my best stab at remembering, but those were some damn good paragraphs.